I’m really getting stuck on “garage sailing” since it’s not, to my knowledge, a common term. I think you need to set it up better to help prime the listener to think of garage sales while talking about things that both “types” could have in common (you’d likely do either on the weekend).
“Somebody told me about garage sailing. So I woke up up early on Saturday morning. And let me tell you, turns out: not as buoyant as they look.”
Or maybe like this, with a bridge that makes the listener lean forward a little and listen harder.
“You know garage sails, right? Bad idea, dangerous, stay away. They just sink.”
Depending on the audience, a bit of setup is necessary to get any payoff. Works great when driving past several garage sales in a row, or if people were just talking about them.
Get rid of that middle sentence.
“I heard about garage sailing. Turns out, they’re not as buoyant as they look”
I sit corrected. That is so much better.
I’m really getting stuck on “garage sailing” since it’s not, to my knowledge, a common term. I think you need to set it up better to help prime the listener to think of garage sales while talking about things that both “types” could have in common (you’d likely do either on the weekend).
“Somebody told me about garage sailing. So I woke up up early on Saturday morning. And let me tell you, turns out: not as buoyant as they look.”
Or maybe like this, with a bridge that makes the listener lean forward a little and listen harder.
“You know garage sails, right? Bad idea, dangerous, stay away. They just sink.”
Depending on the audience, a bit of setup is necessary to get any payoff. Works great when driving past several garage sales in a row, or if people were just talking about them.
You should try yard sailing instead. Much more bouyant, but it’s tricky fiting on something that’s just one yard.