I tried garage sailing once, but it sank.

Some diver is going to be so confused.

  • Usernameblankface@lemmy.worldOP
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    1 year ago

    Hmm, that would be a good addition.

    “I heard about garage sailing. I tried it out one day at the local lake. Turns out, they’re not as buoyant as they look.”

    Something to avoid “sank” or “sunk.” Both of those seem wrong right there.

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      1 year ago

      Get rid of that middle sentence.

      “I heard about garage sailing. Turns out, they’re not as buoyant as they look”

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        1 year ago

        I’m really getting stuck on “garage sailing” since it’s not, to my knowledge, a common term. I think you need to set it up better to help prime the listener to think of garage sales while talking about things that both “types” could have in common (you’d likely do either on the weekend).

        “Somebody told me about garage sailing. So I woke up up early on Saturday morning. And let me tell you, turns out: not as buoyant as they look.”

        Or maybe like this, with a bridge that makes the listener lean forward a little and listen harder.

        “You know garage sails, right? Bad idea, dangerous, stay away. They just sink.”

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          1 year ago

          Depending on the audience, a bit of setup is necessary to get any payoff. Works great when driving past several garage sales in a row, or if people were just talking about them.